Some things I am interested in: sexuality, intimacy, self-awareness, mental illness, and humor, and in the moments when these things overlap.
I am interested in the awkwardness inherent in human relationships and in the awkwardness that comes from documenting subjects that are meant to be private.
My own experiences are the easiest point of access for me, and my personal approach seems to suit these topics. However, I hope to not only make work about connectivity but also to connect to others.
laz:
change to: I am interested in the moments and overlap of blah blah blah
flesh out the part of awkwardness in human relationships
reword and flesh out documenting private subjects part
how can you end stronger?
i think you need a bit more, but there's some good stuff in your draft...
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